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December 16, 2012
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the uniforms of our revolution
will be our naked skin and we
will embrace our execution

we will not need absolution
we will put onto and into our trainees
the uniforms of our revolution

and after our skin-on-skin elocutions
in their beds of contraceptive debris
they too will embrace our execution

they will be envoys of a new evolution
initiating the uninitiated at afternoon teas
in the uniforms of our revolution

and in their post-fuck diminution
the messages they erect on church marquees
will embrace their own execution

then with our tongues bequeathed to the prosecution
and our sweetbreads bequeathed to the mediterranean sea
in the uniforms of our revolution
we will embrace our execution
:icontiganusi:
Re-reading some lines from Grey Gardens for inspiration, I stopped a few times at "This is the revolutionary costume—I'd never wear this in East Hampton". I'd been thinking about a few things lately but heavily so the fucked-up-ness of the world and, in light of the Connecticut school-killings, suicidalness to the point of not caring who you take down with you. As a reply to the line in Grey Gardens I wrote "My revolutionary costume is my skin—I'm not afraid". I took a break, read some Violeta Parra, spent an hour laying in bed half-crying thinking about Anne Sexton's final moments, and came to this.

"Who is it that took away my voice?
The black wound he left in my throat
Can't even cry."


- Bella Akhmadulina, from "Silence"

In spite of the fact that this is a bit literarily heavier and less trolling-the-community than the stuff I usually post here, I thought I'd share it briefly while I think about finding it a forever-home.

Fuck society, and every single component that makes it. Some days I legitimately hate the average citizen of the world.
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`FuzzyHoser Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: I'm normally not big on fixed form poetry, but this is fantastic!
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*TheDorsai Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've had this up on my computer for days. I can't resist coming back to read it every now and then. This is so...mesmerizing.
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`tiganusi Dec 19, 2012  Professional
Thanks. :eyes:
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Weird. This doesn't have the rocking rhythm I usually associate with this form.
You take a lot from Grey Gardens, don't you?
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`tiganusi Dec 16, 2012  Professional
I wanted it to feel a bit more... walk-like, I guess.

Yeah Grey Gardens is a fucking gold mine lately.
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~Hanachi-Shitsukki Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this, it flows very well and the rythm is enchanting. I wish I could give you better constructive criticism, but I'm too busy singing your poem out loud!
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:iconglossolalias:
mmm, well done.
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^neurotype Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn, it did turn out well. Go write more fixed forms.

Can't decide if the last two lines should be a scream or a whisper.
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